5. Oubaitori

[gunwithoutmusic]

Eye to the telescope
And we were singing along
But I never wanted a rival
It just came about when
Our similarities enshrined themselves
Our differences exiled themselves

A certain yearning exists
When you provide your own edification
To enmesh yourself with yourself
You were so close
A carnival mirror
A copper pan

The hibiscus is in bloom today
By the time I see them again
The flowers will be shriveled
Clinging half-heartedly to their branches
But more will come again tomorrow

Comments

[halfshellvenus]

You were so close
A carnival mirror
A copper pan
I liked these lines--almost there, but a little skewed somehow. Maybe when we rely solely on ourselves, we do not always feel complete. There's no external validation, no sense of really being "seen". Despite how hard we've worked and how much we might deserve it.

[gunwithoutmusic]

Thank you so much! I've always been one to say that I don't need external validation or support, but as I get older I think I'm letting go of that. It's not great feeling lonely even if you're surrounded by people.