4. Uncanny Valley

[gunwithoutmusic]

it's in the penumbra
that i find you
the place where no one looks

the periphery holds
our dreams
our fears

our silence

we can exist here
descending into the fantastic
and closing our senses
and our minds
and
and
and

it will pass
the silence
with our dreams
with our fears

while we wait

Comments

[halfshellvenus]

I love the whole concept of this!

[yachiru]

Penumbra is such a lovely word. I like how quiet this is.

[muchtooarrogant]

I like your first stanza, the wording pulled me right in.

Dam

[static_abyss]

I love the structure of this poem and the way it fits with the idea of the penumbra and the periphery. Excellently done!

[mollywheezy]

Excellent poem as always!

[thephantomq]

This has a very ephemeral feel to it -- and packed in so few words, too.

[murielle]

Wow, S!

This is incredible! So, when will you be publishing a collection? I'm not being facetious. I mean it. Seriously. ❤

[rayaso]

This is outstanding! I love the three "and" lines, as well as the general structure.

[reidharriscooper]

excellent play on structure usage.