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gunwithoutmusic ([personal profile] gunwithoutmusic) wrote2024-09-04 03:11 pm

8. Bycatch

if my mouth could
form words
like my fingers

if my heart could
hold strength
like my hands

we lingered in this spot
each of us considering but
no lips move
no breath forms

we will find them too late
amongst our
scattered thoughts
i will write them

you will push them down
i will hide my papers
we will never know of
the thoughts we share

but we will know the feeling
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[personal profile] erulissedances 2024-09-04 07:28 pm (UTC)(link)
This was interesting. I don't often see open verse that I enjoy, but this one had some mysteries that called to me.

- Erulisse (one L)
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[personal profile] adoptedwriter 2024-09-04 08:02 pm (UTC)(link)
I am taking this as when people have feelings but do not act upon them? They just know.
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[personal profile] mollywheezy 2024-09-05 07:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Intriguing! :)
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[personal profile] muchtooarrogant 2024-09-06 02:34 am (UTC)(link)
To me, this suggests two people failing to communicate, but having similar feelings.

Dan
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[personal profile] halfshellvenus 2024-09-06 07:44 am (UTC)(link)
I like the sense of not-quite-communicating here, of the awkwardness between two people who both perhaps want something more but have only almost discovered that.
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[personal profile] fausts_dream 2024-09-06 03:39 pm (UTC)(link)
You are a formidable and powerful poet glad to share this competition with you.