5a. Open Topic

[gunwithoutmusic]

let's not call it “giving up”
maybe “moratorium” is better
i’ve never been one
to call myself a quitter

(but i’ve never been one
to call myself lots of things)

i spoke to you often
about the power of a word
about finding just the right fit
about agonizing over it

(not that you understood
but i understood that)

it seems so final
not just a drop of the ball
but an intentional release
a saying, “i was never
enough,”

(and a thinking about
the truth behind it)

let's neither call it “giving up”
nor embrace the finality of the words
let's give it another Name

Comments

[muchtooarrogant]

Agreed, words are very powerful. Nicely expressed.

Dan

[bleodswean]

I'm appreciating you offering a bit of work to your reader. Makes it compelling!

[roina_arwen]

Never give up! Never surrender! (Toy Story)

[banana_galaxy]

Ouch. I feel this one really deeply. I hope this isn't something you're experiencing right now. A moratorium might feel better than giving up in the moment, but I've been in a state of limbo, and it's just as painful, if not more so, than actually ending something.

[mollywheezy]

I certainly relate to trying to find the right words! Excellent job as always!

[chasing_silver]

I love that you've done poetry this whole season. I really love poetry, and yours has been such a pleasure to read!

[erulissedances]

but an intentional release
a saying, “i was never
enough,”

No, you were and are enough. Never EVER consider that you were/are not enough. Your words have power, they may not have hit the correct audience this time, but they will in the future. *hugs*

- Erulisse (one L)

[murielle]

Your poetry is so powerful. I know, I'm repeating myself, but it bears repeating. This is so beautiful and so sad and so final. And, that last line is a killer.

[alycewilson]

Your words remind me of the song "Wise Up" by Aimee Mann, where she explores a similar idea: when it's okay to just walk away and the myriad emotions involved.

I also want to add that I love that you're sticking with poetry this time. I'm writing poetry when it feels like the right direction, and so far most weeks, it has. I'm hoping you stay in!

[fausts_dream]

Poetry in idol is a risky endeavor but you do it well and I admire the boldness so I'll be giving this one of my votes.

[swirlsofpurple]

love this, very evocative *hugs*

[sohardtohold]

This feels like a very poetic window into your mind during a moment that was very impactful on you. It also feels like a bit of a call to the reader who maybe has not reached their decision yet. Or maybe I am reading that into your words. Beautiful.

[halfshellvenus]

I hope this doesn't relate to anything happening right now!

I like how there's a hint of hope in the refusal to label the situation as "over." It may be one-sided hope, but that's a start.

[flipflop_diva]

I read the first stanza and was worried you were trying to sacrifice! So phew!!

I really love this! Mostly because it can apply to so many situations — not just relationships but to jobs or just anything you have to put effort into to sustain. It's sad but there is a tiny bit of hope in finally choosing to purposely let something go and I really love that.

[reidharriscooper]

Hrmmmm....
very thoughtful.
Makes me think of end of the Road by Boyz II Men strangely.